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Just a helpful fix

Ted (Guest) 23 Apr 2013

Just wanted to let you know that the last line/speech bubble is broken English. It should say something like, "I hope it is still inhabited." or "I hope it will still be inhabited."

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text bubble mismatch

Line Noise (Guest) 24 Apr 2013

There is also a context mismatch between the first and second speech bubble.
The first bubble suggest that ALL dragon temples are abandoned, you may wish to change the word "previous" to "many" or "most". For the second bubble something like "I hope this next one is inhabited".

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crazylupus 27 Apr 2013

Un petit momemt que je n'étais pas venu et toujours autant de plaisir à la lecture. Cette histoire prend des tournures fort intéressantes *-*